Saturday, June 12, 2010

probably the worst poem i've ever written*

removed due to excess ego

* except for the one in high school where i was high and listening to Madonna's Erotica

Maggie May said...

if i hacked off the last three stanzas it would be all right. i don't feel like it! ha!

hm.

Kay said...

from the heart, it's all beautiful! :)

Wine and Words said...

It's a beautiful poem...full of heart and truth and love. I wouldn't hack any of it if I were you.

Rene said...

it's hard to put all that love into to words...because it is beyond their capability. It's like when you take a picture of something, it's just never as beautiful as the subject. There's alway this little disappointment.. "Oh you had to see it, it was just magnificent!!!" I enjoyed this, though. It made me feel every bit of 16 and a half...and I've been reminiscing about that time a lot lately. Crazy forties!
Blue balled car! (snort)

Peace ~ Rene

erin said...

Awww. Maggot Pie! I love it.

just making my way said...

Oh, I don't know. I like the John Cusack reference!

Miss Malorie said...

no, the breast-in-mouth syndrome isn't quite masculine, but I know a man who lights my world aflame with this simple act... I've never felt that way about it in my life, with anyone else <3

I like your "worst" poem :)

Marion said...

I think the entire poem is awesome. In my opinion, there are no bad poems. The world needs all the poetry it can get. Thanks for sharing this. Blessings!

Anne said...

I do like the way you use 'revolution' when what might be expected is 'revelation' :)

(thanks for your comment, btw)

The Storialist said...

I enjoyed this. Let it sit for a while and then you can decide how best to edit it.

Terresa said...

Beautiful poem, but I can understand posting/sharing a poem and not liking it. That happens with me sometimes and I want to disappear or wish back the poem or somehow undo it, like eating too many Baked Cheeto puffs and feeling regret.

But this poem is much gorgeousness. Much.

Annie said...

Hi Maggie,

You use great imagery, and cliches are not cliches when they say everything you mean. This poem is genuine and sincere, and it reminds the reader how transforming a real love can be, and how when it is right, we know it.

I love this truth:
"love is full of these cliches. yet singularly beautiful despite."

Ms. Moon said...

I wish this were MY worst poem.

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